Another entry for Weekend Writing Warriors. WeWriWa is a blog site open to all authors/writers published or unpublished. Follow the simple instructions on their blog to sign up and then post a snippet of writing on your own blog to join in on the fun.
This excerpt is from the same short story I did the last two weeks. It's from a competition I did a few years ago. The assignment was to write an event that was sad and tragic.
Entry #3 **Trigger warning. Sensitive issues covered***
I took it, I took it all. I took the ridicule at school because I only had three outfits and often times smelled. It’s not like I wanted to smell, but more times than not, the water was turned off in the single wide we lived in. Food was a luxury I didn’t get often since she'd rather drink away our government assistance. Then she met John. He was a doctor she met while on shift at the diner. My mother was always cruel and heartless, but she had reached an all time low when she informed me that he had paid for a night with me. Not only that, but if he enjoyed himself, it would be a regular thing and she would finally have a way out of this terrible life. I would finally be useful to her.
This excerpt is from the same short story I did the last two weeks. It's from a competition I did a few years ago. The assignment was to write an event that was sad and tragic.
Entry #3 **Trigger warning. Sensitive issues covered***
Her Own Hands
I took it, I took it all. I took the ridicule at school because I only had three outfits and often times smelled. It’s not like I wanted to smell, but more times than not, the water was turned off in the single wide we lived in. Food was a luxury I didn’t get often since she'd rather drink away our government assistance. Then she met John. He was a doctor she met while on shift at the diner. My mother was always cruel and heartless, but she had reached an all time low when she informed me that he had paid for a night with me. Not only that, but if he enjoyed himself, it would be a regular thing and she would finally have a way out of this terrible life. I would finally be useful to her.
This kind of mother I will never understand. Your story breaks my heart Meka.
ReplyDelete:( It's sad that there are these kinds of people out in the world. I'll try to do a happier piece when this is done.
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Very sad....well written but heart rending.
ReplyDeletethanks, good to know it's packing the punch it was intended to
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This was gut wrenching. Her mother, I just don't have the words. Such an intensely powerful piece.
ReplyDeleteHer mother was a horrible person and the poor girl tried to endure for as long as she could.
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Wow, this makes me feel for the character so much. A very powerful story you have written here. Can't wait for next week!
ReplyDeletethe poor girl is in a lose/lose situation sadly. :( Next week is the conclusion and then I need to see if I can come up with a happier piece.
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Hey Meka,
ReplyDeleteO.M.G. that's awful (in a good way)!!! Wow, that mom is really a piece of work. You've managed to make me hate her as a reader, so I already feel so bad for your main character. Your writing style flows great; I didn't want the snippet to be over! Interesting drama, depressing backstory--all the makings of an enjoyable book in my eyes.
Keep smiling,
Yawatta
Glad it's awful, but in a good way. LOL The mom is terrible, no good qualities about her at all sadly.
DeleteThank you for the compliment on the writing. Not sure if I could spin this into a book, but anything is possible.
thanks for stopping by. :)