Saturday, August 9, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors entry #4


Another entry for Weekend Writing Warriors. WeWriWa is a blog site open to all authors/writers published or unpublished. Follow the simple instructions on their blog to sign up and then post a snippet of writing on your own blog to join in on the fun.



This excerpt is from the same short story I did last week. It's from a competition I did a few years ago. The assignment was to write an event that was sad and tragic.
Part 1  Part 2  Part 3

Entry #4 **final installment**

Her Own Hands

She told me to go put on something pretty while she fixed him a drink. I remember my shaky legs carrying me into the bathroom. I saw the blood thinners she had left after her surgery. I felt the tears streaming down my face as I popped the cap and forced down all the pills before picking up the razor sitting on the side of the tub and bringing it to my wrists.
"We need to stop the bleeding?" I heard someone yell.
"Do you know what she took?" another voice asked.
"We're losing her," someone shouted.
The sounds faded and the darkness surrounded me like a warm blanket. 


That's it for this story. I will see if the next entries can be something more upbeat. :)

10 comments:

  1. What a compelling scene. It prompted me to go back and read the first three installments. Nicely done!

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  2. Whoa. Stop the scene, the director says. Way sad and you accomplished your goal, Meka. Def-more upbeat next time.

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    1. LOL...I will see if I can come up with something upbeat.

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  3. Holy smokes, that snippet is the definition of tragedy. I had to go back and read the first three parts because the last part was so compelling. Great snippet.

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  4. It's sad...but at the same time, I think for this little girl, I think the darkness would be a warm comforting blanket. I loved the way you ended that.

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    1. Thank you. It is a sad ending for her but she didn't see any other options.

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  5. Hey Meka,

    I enjoy dramas, so it doesn't bother me if stories aren't upbeat. I loved the ending--that her pending death feels like a warm blanket (something of comfort). Unless the paramedics can save her? I'll say it again, what a horrible mother!

    Keep smiling,
    Yawatta

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    1. Glad to know you don't need happy and upbeat. This was was really depressing so I'll try and make the next installments not so terribly sad. And yes her mother was a real piece of work. :( No she didn't survive.

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